1. What time do you usually go to bed on a school night? -earlier than 12 am -12am to 1am -1am to 2am -Later than 2am 2. Do you usually get a full 8 hours of sleep? -yes -no 3. Reasons for staying up on a school night? -homework/studying -technology -hanging out with friends -other 4. Do you feel tired throughout the day? -yes -no 5. Do you believe your schoolwork and performance is affected by sleep? -yes -no 6. Do you feel you struggle in school without getting a full night sleep? -yes -no
1) when going back to review your paper, look at the language you use. Try to be more straight forward, instead of being simple.
ReplyDelete2) look through your paper for where you can add commas. I add parts where I felt there should be commas. I try to read my paper out loud slowly, so I can find where commas are needed.
3) you are missing your appendix, so just add that.
4) also look at APA format because the Abstract should be on its own page, along with the references and appendix.
5) I think you have a very strong argument and you explained it well. just to add on, you can try to go into more detail about the effect it has on students. For example, try to find previous studies and add that.
6) your graphs are very strong and give a good representation of your findings.
I think you have a strong paper, good job!
1.) Overall, this essay had great flow from paragraph to paragraph. In addition, I would try to be a little more concise when it comes to word choice.
ReplyDelete2.) The language used is very professional and all of it is utilized well to interoperate the data. Also, all the pages follow APA format but the text is not times new roman.
3.) There are two problems with the layout. You just need to add the appendix and also have the abstract be on its own page.
4.) The research and data used in this essay was excellent. All the graphs were very well described and used in the essay.
Overall, Great essay and very interesting research.